WWW- you have produced a good piece of work suitable for the target audience with a very competent mode of address
EBI- you had used a different means to highlight the key words, underlining or bolding them for example- the different colours don't work. You also need to make the writing smaller, font size 8 is normal for magazine copy and also make the pagination a different size/font.
Literacy point- check your use of possessive apostrophes- as in "horses' ears" when referring to plurals
WWW- you have produced a good piece of work suitable for the target audience with a very competent mode of address
ReplyDeleteEBI- you had used a different means to highlight the key words, underlining or bolding them for example- the different colours don't work. You also need to make the writing smaller, font size 8 is normal for magazine copy and also make the pagination a different size/font.
Literacy point- check your use of possessive apostrophes- as in "horses' ears" when referring to plurals
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